Requests for a review of the user's Chinese writing.
Questions tagged [writing-critique]
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Is this sentence correct ? 我不知道会发我们的什么照片,所以就选择这个
你们好!
Hi, can you please tell me is this sentence correct?:
我不知道会发我们的什么照片,所以就选择[了]这个。 (I don't know to post which photo of us, so I chose this one).
谢谢 !
M.m
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Writing critique request: Zhou Ziwang and the revolutionary new technology
Here's the start of a short story I'm…
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Is my mini text correct? How can I write it better?
我的名字是Leandro, 我在学习汉语三年。这是一号的文本，这是不好。 我要会说汉语因为我要走工作自中国.
What i tried to write:
My name is Leandro, I've been studying Chinese for 3 years. This is my first text, it isn't good. I want to speak Chinese so I can work in China.
Thanks in advance!
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Critique request: three 筹备 sentences: 有的人的筹备很不合理 and 北京花了很长时间做筹备工作 and 不需要筹备任何配料
(Update: There was a typo: 之间 should be 时间. I corrected it.)
I wrote these sentences to practice using 筹备 instead of 准备 which I'm more familiar with.
脱欧后，有的人的筹备很不合理！
北京花了很长时间做筹备工作，不过因为冠状病毒的发现，政府推迟新年的庆祝。
西红柿炒鸡蛋是个很简单的菜，不需要筹备任何配料。
I'm seeking a…
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Writing critique request: Zhou Ziwang's father takes her to the "doctor"
Continuing from part 2 (see also part 1):
我妈注意到我当时变胖了，她想要帮我减肥但是长期以来的饮食习惯改不掉。难道说…
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Writing critique request: Zhou Ziwang was fat when she was young
Continuing on from part 1:
当我是女孩时，世界上最重要的是吃巧克力和其它甜食。我爱吃麦当劳、我爱吃比萨、我爱吃巧克力蛋糕。我爸忙时就让我吃，如此我不打扰他，而他经常在电脑上工作。并不奇怪的是，我当时很胖。
虽然我很小，但不得不注意到了别人不同的对待我，使我感到对自己的身体不满意，而我变得越来越难过了。我渴望变瘦了，或者至少不那么胖。那时候我知道吃热量高的食物让人长胖，可是甚至成年人遇到控制体重的困难，仅仅少吃不够减肥。吃巧克力使我心里感到很满足。
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Which is better: my 盲目、过多、肤浅地夸大孩子有什么用呢？ or ChatGPT's 过度、过多地强调这些方面对孩子的实际语言学习帮助有限?
In my daily writing, I criticize language-learning apps that say blindly tell students "you're really great" etc.:
虽然鼓励学生是老师必不可少责任之一，但是app盲目、过多、肤浅地夸大孩子有什么用呢？
ChatGPT changed it to this
虽然鼓励学生是老师必不可少的责任之一，但是app过度、过多地强调这些方面对孩子的实际语言学习帮助有限。
It's…
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Is this sentence correct? "中国发送给我们国家很多帮助"
大家好!
Hi, can you please tell me is this sentence correct?
请问，这个句子对吗 ?:
在疫情其间中国发送给我们国家很多帮助。
谢谢 !
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Writing critique request: Upgrading your DNA is like upgrading software on your computer
Continuing from parts 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, and…
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How do I correct 我几乎在享受中想象着听这样建议的可怜的男人?
I'm trying to say this in English:
I am almost enjoying imagining the poor men who listen to these suggestions, ...
The context is peacocking: Peacocking means dressing for attention; just like peacocks use their feathers to get a mate. My…
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Writing critique request: Zhou Ziwang's father's explanation of how we reached a "DNA editing revolution"
Continuing from parts 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, and…
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Writing critique request: Welcome to the world of DNA editing
Continuing from parts 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, and…
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Writing critique request: Zhou Ziwang loses weight, just like everyone else nowadays
Continuing from parts 1, 2, 3, 4, and…
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Writing critique request: the almost imperceptible effects of Zhou Ziwang's injection
Continuing from parts 1, 2, 3, and 4:
一周过去了但没有任何效果，我还是很胖。在做日常活动的过程中，我渐渐忘了那个神秘的医生和他的注射器。再一周过去了，我的行为几乎感觉不到任何变化，我还真想吃巧克力和其他的垃圾食品。其实当时那支注射器有意外甚至不易察觉的影响，不过到现在我还不知道如何清楚的解释这样的感觉。我想吃巧克时，身体似乎自动地反应，而连吃巧克力以前我都感觉到很满意。这是我现在的解释，可是肯定是不准确的。
Please critique my…
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Writing critique request: Zhou Ziwang gets an injection from the "doctor"
Continuing from part 3 (with the story starting at part 1):
我们到了医务室，这家楼看起来像实验室，而并不是像普通的医院。我看着我爸，他似乎已经对这个地方很熟悉，甚至知道怎么走。他说了“我的朋友在这儿工作”。我们一进去就看到医生了，而他带我们去他的办公室。医生立刻从桌子的抽屉中取出了一只注射器，说“这会解决你的体重问题…
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