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I've generated the following translations for these two sentences, but they don't quite sound right to me. I'd like some feedback!

After the pink progress bar disappears, you must restart the device to complete the upgrade. = Une fois que la barre de progression rose disparaît, redémarrez l'appareil pour terminer la mise à niveau.

The process may take several minutes. = Le processus peut prendre quelques minutes.

Please advise! I don't want the text to sound too robotic or formal. How would this sound in conversational Canadian French?

T. Jewell
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  • Quebecer reporting in. Both of these sound fine to me. – ApplePie Apr 21 '17 at 23:14
  • several = plusieurs (not quelques) – Pas un clue Apr 21 '17 at 23:18
  • @Feelew I wouldn't reject quelques which looks to me as good as plusieurs here. – jlliagre Apr 22 '17 at 12:05
  • @jlliagre, Here is the time to transmit the very useful information Volée de chênes et rosiers indicated to me just a few days ago about plusieurs in France and New France. Cheers mate! – Pas un clue Apr 23 '17 at 00:27
  • @Feelew Interesting thanks. The OQLF also states Le déterminant pluriel quelques signifie « plusieurs, un petit nombre de, un certain nombre de » so should still properly translate "several" unless I'm missing something. – jlliagre Apr 23 '17 at 08:27
  • @jlliagre Generally in Quebec plusieurs is more than quelques. «Plusieurs personnes à la réunion» is rather positive. «Quelques personnes à la réunion» neutral or slightly disappointed. The only point where I could see the two words being just about equivalent would be with tiny things, like snowflakes, sand grains, mosquitoes: «qq/plusieurs flocons sont tombés» or _«il a laissé qq/plusieurs grains de sable sur le plancher» are just about equivalent. – Pas un clue Apr 23 '17 at 11:23
  • @jlliagre My last comment was made early in the morning, when my thoughts were not quite as clear as I now wish they had been. Basically, while plusieurs does have common grounds with both quelques and several, these last two do not overlap. Several is on the ‘beaucoup’ end of plusieurs, while quelques is rather on the ‘un peu’ end. Sorry for being muddy in my previous comment. – Pas un clue Apr 24 '17 at 01:33
  • @Feelew Thanks. My issue is probably more with correctly understanding "several" than with quelques/plusieurs. In France French, both quelques and plusieurs span the same range of numbers (between two or three and not much more than ten, more than that would be une dizaine, quelques dizaines, …). Quelques means the actual value is likely to be the lower range while plusieurs means the actual value can be anywhere in the range. They definitely overlap here. – jlliagre Apr 24 '17 at 08:46
  • @jlliagre Indeed re: "several" — I'd say that whatever the denotation, the connotation of "several" is influenced by its not being the alternative: "a few"! – Luke Sawczak Apr 24 '17 at 18:57

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The une fois structure doesn't work quite like "once" in English.

Une fois la barre de progression rose disparue, redémarrez l'appareil pour terminer la mise à niveau.

As Feelew writes, quelques could be replaced by plusieurs. (I think quelques connotes that it'll be "only a few", whereas the English usually reads like an invitation to go make yourself a cup of tea.)

Le processus peut prendre plusieurs minutes.

You can also trade the "can" of peut for the "could" of pourrait, though both seem okay to me here.

Le processus pourrait prendre plusieurs minutes.

Those are my suggestions. I'm open to anyone else's if they want to comment them.

Edit: Also, noting the comments below, if you give some extra context as to what sort of upgrade it is, we can help decide if the various terms are perfectly right (type of process, significance of upgrade...).

Luke Sawczak
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  • I believe the conditional might sound better, for a reason I cannot quite pinpoint. Also, while I process my data at the end of the day on an English job, je traite mes données on a French job... «Le traitement pourrait prendre plusieurs minutes» could be considered. – Pas un clue Apr 22 '17 at 08:55
  • @Feelew But this is not about data analysis. I's clearly about some sort of software update. "traitement" has no business anywhere near this translation. On the other end, it should be mise à jour*, not mise à niveau*. – Circeus Apr 22 '17 at 11:57
  • @Circeus "Upgrade" can be translated by mise à niveau and "update" by mise à jour although the latter might be used for both. This topic has been discussed and not everyone agreed. See https://french.stackexchange.com/questions/16254/update-vs-upgrade-in-french – jlliagre Apr 22 '17 at 12:11
  • True. I'm guilty of not having put together the two sentences. It is indeed about updates, and not about treating data. I just found processus quite vague and thought it could be processed as a unit. My mistake. – Pas un clue Apr 23 '17 at 00:24